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Through the eyes of a child
Replies: 6Last Post July 8 1:22pm by ajmcal
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Good 6 27%
Bad 6 27%
Ok - could do with improving 10 45%
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Through the eyes of a child

It has been said that the future is not our to see, yet it's never been said why. Is it to protect us? To stop us doing what most would? What if we can see our fate we just decide to ignore it, because of fear, because of ignorance, because of curiosity? The world is full of questions but only half empty of answers. I guess most of our future we have laid before us isn't what we would like to live on knowing after all, therefore, is life really a blessing?

I know it's not perfect but I am only a GCSE student, anyway any comments?


6:25 am on July 5, 2008
SkateboardBabe


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Deep stuff. I would go through the punctuation again, but otherwise impressive. (For meerly a GCSE student Lol)

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blufindr


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ooh shit... i thought this poll was an agree/disagree.
dismiss my bad vote. it was good. and i agree, the future pretty much sucks.

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sunshineshower


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I like it, I would like to see the points expanded. Develop each point, make some new ones. Other than that just punctuation. For GCSE its very good.

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Do I dare
Disturb the universe?
In a minute there is time for decisions and revelations
which a minute will reverse - T.S. Eliot

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boothy

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The future isn't ours to see because we are not prophets, and therefore that would be impossible.

Other than me being pedantic, not a bad effort at all.

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boombabyy


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what is GCSE? and this does sound great

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I've been selected as an ambassador for Childline, to tell you about this great new competition. The idea is that you have to write 100 words on something that matters to you. This can be anything from friends to music to your dog! And that's only about 8 lines of writing! Celebrities like Taio Cruz, Kirsty Gallagher, Rick Edwards, Zezi Ifore and Nick Hornby are also participating because this is such a great cause!

Plus if you win, you get a years supply of penguin books and your text published
If you want to enter, you can at http://www.spinebreakers.co.uk/Competitions/Pages/papercuts.aspx

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